G324 - Rough Cut 1 and Feedback

Feedback:
Mr B:
The first chorus shot is too long. There is a flaw in your narrative - who is the guy in the tie? We need to have a clear narrative built up before he comes in. If you're struggling with the narrative as you have it, swap it over so that it's the singer that abandoned his friend, rather than the other way around. We need to have more actual polaroid pictures in there somewhere.

Mrs W:
For the majority of the first verse, lip sync a younger version of the artist to create a clear connection between the two people and to indicate that things have changed over time. You haven't done as much as you could have for this. You could use a close up on his phone for the line about not having his number, film a polaroid camera taking and printing a picture, create polaroid pictures of a wedding and of children and lay them in front of the camera throughout the video duration. Also, the first chorus shot IS too long. Break it up with the shots I mentioned before.

Posted by Olivia Calver and Samuel Skinner